Short attempt at Cyberpunk.

Todays word is unreconstructed and yesterdays was CyberPunk. I used yesterdays word as my setting and an exploration of a character I’d like to play in an upcoming ShadowRun game.

Comments are always apreciated.

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There wasn’t much to do in the great suburbs of North Bay for a young man that didn’t enjoy drugs. It wasn’t his fault really he had been cursed with a rare disorder making cybernetic implants impossible. All the best drugs played with you cybernetics but all they did to him was give him indigestion.

In the great spiralling cities of North Canada, all four of them, youths. or Tkeens as the media liked to call them, all felt they needed the newest apple cybernetics upgrade. It was the “kool” thing to do. This left poor Gereon pretty lonely

When he was younger, all he wanted to do was become a Jacker. He would pretend to connect to the home computer with his Bluetooth implant or track an illegal on the intertubes. His father broke the new to him when he was twelve and crushed his hopes of ever becoming a cop.

With time he learnt to accept that he would never be able to see the intertubes in the same way as his friends. Eventually he even learnt to work around it using self built remotes and gadgets.

Most Tkeens didn’t need to learn things the old fashion way, they would simply get the information transferred to their USB drives and spend a day groking it. This made society much more orderly everyone had their place and everyone had their job. He spent a lot of time having to learn things from books and on his displays. His father, before disappearing, had brought him boxes of real books. Gereon thought they had all been destroyed and knew his father shouldn’t have had them, it wasn’t against the law but it was frowned upon. “When Mother Frowns, The World Frowns” would say the great Mothercorp when advertising frowned behaviour.  

After your Tkeens were done, around 24, you’d take your place where the Mothermind told you. He had never been able to here the Mothermind, a side effect he assumed, but he was assured she knew he existed.

He was quickly approaching his seventeenth year and with little to do he would play with electronics and mechanical constructions. He had lots of time to develop his skills and his devices had a unique form to them as he was unique in his condition. He, most of all, enjoyed miniature bots that he could control from a distance with his interface.

Living alone wasn’t too bad but people always looked at him funny that is when they looked at him instead of straight through him. One day he was walking the city to see a little more of the world and he saw two Jackers walking towards him. Nodding politely he gave a half smile at the officers.

“Hey look Kan it’s an anti-tech, what you doing outside the reserve freak.” Said the larger and uglier of the two.

“I’m not an anti-tech sir, I have a medical condition would you like to scan my RF chip?” Said Gereon holding out his right palm. The Jacker’s looked down at his wrist and their ocular implants whirred for a moment before they looked at him again.

“Shoves a fake chip at us, lies, doesn’t even have the dignity to do it well. I’d say that’s a hostile act Pit.” Said the littler Jacker, or Moma’s Boy as the Tkeens called them behind their backs. He grabbed Gereon’s wrist and twisted his arm while the bigger man kicked him in the stomach.

They beat on him for almost a half hour, before they left the larger man said, “Let that be a lesson to you, you anti-tech garbage. Stay on the reserve or let go of your unreconstructed way of thinking.”  

Somehow through shear force of will he managed to crawl home and give a quick pre-programmed order to his bots. They carried him to bed and called the doctor. It was weeks before he could walk again and months before he could do so without pain. He too the time to investigate his chip, discovering that it was a fake and that he had no idea why. His father had implanted him with the non-invasive chip when he was a boy.

Where was his father and why had he done this? What else did he lie to him about? Gereon decided that he needed to find his father but in order to do that he’d need a better chip and some fake implants.

Dusting off the old blog.

This blog has been silent for too long. I think I overdosed on writing during NaNoWriMo. Sadly I have yet to touch my novel. I’m scared to go back to it. I will soon and I’ll finish it even though I know it’ll take me twice as long to edit as it did to write.

I’ve decided that I have only two new resolutions for this year. I’ll keep the old ones and continue with them. The new ones are simple; 1. Marry Jen (My fiancée}. 2. Write everyday, other then emails.

In order to encourage the second resolution, I have added the Merriam-Webster’s word of the day to my Google home page. What I plan to do is write 500 words and include the word of the day in it. The writing could me a mini story, character sketch, place description, action scene, etc.

Hopefully it will give me an excuse to write and help me improve my style. Maybe it’ll even give me a good start for a new story or novel.

Let’s give it a try. Todays word is Indubitable

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The forest opened into a small valley, it’s grass was a dark green spotted by tiny yellow flowers. The valley abruptly fell become a sharp scraggly cliff that looked over the ocean. It was dawn and the premature light sluggishly reflected on the surface of the ocean casting double shadows along the valley.

As the light grew stronger so did the shadows and their blackness, a striking contrast to the vibrant greens, yellows, and browns of the valley. Sitting on the edge of the valley in the front seat for the spectacle of morning was a single red rose. Several small drops of dew, still clinging to its petals, fell as the rose opened itself to the new day.

This was one of those mystical valleys that have become rarer these past few centuries. The air was fragrant and once the sun rose out of its dawn a small island could be seen at the distance, the only proof that anything existed beyond the valley. Pigs, dragons, and other shapes flew over the valley, formed of white fluffy clouds. Unicorns could easily have come out of the woods and been at home in the valley. There was no sign that any human had ever touched this mystical land.

Nothing could be farther from the truth however. This valley had been discovered and rediscovered by countless people. Thousands have lain on that grass and pondered its indubitable beauty; it was a secret that no one spoke of. The world stopped when they lay there and for that reason countless had brought their significant others, a few had brought them here to express their undying love.

It was both a place and day that movies try to reproduce but always seem to cheapen. It was a place the Romantics would consider utterly powerful and that the romantics would consider perfect for a picnic. The only thing missing from the valley were insects of the stinging variety, with the exception of the occasional bee, and no one complained.

Everything about the valley was wonderful, beautiful and perfect. It was in stark contrast to the murder that occurred that day.

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Ok I think that went well.

Till later
Aspiring Something

What a year!

It has been one hell of a full year; a real rollercoaster ride with all the heart stopping twists and turns.

Let’s star with Viridian Sky, after November 24th I stalled completely on the story, since I’ve written maybe 2000 words. It’s not a terrible thing it’s just a by product or absolutely no planning ahead on my part. I have a good idea what’s going to happen from now on I just need a good ending to work towards. I don’t have any illusions, this book is ok and should be a little better after I fix certain things but it’s not great. Writing a great novel wasn’t the point of it anyways, writing a novel was my point and I’ve proven that I can do it. Well almost. I look forward to finishing it and cleaning it up. Hopefully I can do it before February for everyone who wants to beta read.

This morning I was walking to work thinking about the holidays. It’s going to be hard this Christmas. It was my mom’s favorite holiday and it’s going to be hard without her. As I was walking this morning the song, “Christmas (Baby Please Come Home)” came on my MP3 player and I couldn’t help crying. It’s still hard for part of my mind to realize she’s gone.

I miss her.

Many happy things happened this year as well. I proposed to my girlfriend and she said yes. We planned a good portion of the wedding and I’m very excited.

I spent the year job hopping. I’ve had 5 jobs this year and find myself unemployed. Although I do have several options open right now. Worst case I’m unemployed for a week and get to work on the novel.

On my livejournal I posted my annual Resolutions last year and I though it would be nice to look them over and see how I’ve done:

http://edesmarais.livejournal.com/41476.html
– Exercise more, join a gym. (Maybe if I pay for it I’ll go more often?)
– Write more.
– Draw more.
– Take more pictures.
– Start a D&D group.
– Start a Webcomic.
– Be more positive.
– Take an acting class this summer.
– Take at least one university class in spring.
– Pay off most of my debts.
– Keep moving Forward.
– Propose to Jen

Well I can split this into two groups, those I’ve completed and those I haven’t.

Completed: Write more, Draw more, Take more pictures, Start a D&D group, Be more positive, Keep moving Forward, Propose to Jen.

Not: – Exercise more, join a gym, Start a Webcomic, Take an acting class this summer, Take at least one university class in spring, Pay off most of my debts.

I did pay off some debts but not most and I will be taking a class in Winter… I hope.

Overal 7/12 humm 58%

Well that’s not really good but I’m still proud of the things I have done.

It’s been a tough year and I look forward to the next. I’ll post my new years resolutions some time soon.

NaNoWriMo/Viridian Sky Update Four

The novel is going really well, I’ll officially hit 50 000 later today technically winning NaNoWriMo. I’m surprised how easy it was for me to force myself to write everyday and I’m also impressed at how difficult it was to write. I hope I can keep the same pace or close in the coming month.

The book is split into three parts, the first part being introduction, the second being the race, and the third being still unknown.

I’m coming up to the end of the second part. It has been filled with action and I’m starting to get better at describing fight scenes, I think. The characters have been growing together and the angst-y romance is coming together. The big twists will be coming up at the end of part two so please keep voting.

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I have a large battle with one of the main baddies and after that I’m completely stumped. I’ve never reached an ending for a book before and this one doesn’t seem to have a clear cut ending. As with other times I was stuck here’s a poll.

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I’ve decided on Viridian Sky as the title but that can always change. In future posts I’ll refer to the book by its title instead of NaNoWriMo.

Hope the next 30 000 or 40 000 words go as easily as the first 50 000.

Thank you!

NaNoWriMo/Viridian Sky Update Four

The novel is going really well, I’ll officially hit 50 000 later today technically winning NaNoWriMo. I’m surprised how easy it was for me to force myself to write everyday and I’m also impressed at how difficult it was to write. I hope I can keep the same pace or close in the coming month.

The book is split into three parts, the first part being introduction, the second being the race, and the third being still unknown.

I’m coming up to the end of the second part. It has been filled with action and I’m starting to get better at describing fight scenes, I think. The characters have been growing together and the angst-y romance is coming together. The big twists will be coming up at the end of part two so please keep voting.

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I have a large battle with one of the main baddies and after that I’m completely stumped. I’ve never reached an ending for a book before and this one doesn’t seem to have a clear cut ending. As with other times I was stuck here’s a poll.

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I’ve decided on Viridian Sky as the title but that can always change. In future posts I’ll refer to the book by its title instead of NaNoWriMo.

Hope the next 30 000 or 40 000 words go as easily as the first 50 000.

Thank you!

NaNoWriMo Update Three

I’ve finally written past the boring parts of my novel. I’m sure they’re interesting to read, they just weren’t much fun to write. The characters are working together and I have more actions scenes coming up. I’m finding it a little hard to right cool gunfight scenes, maybe I should re-watch Firefly.

I’ve long past the NaNoWriMo halfway mark and I’m quickly approaching the novels half way mark. The halfway mark is 45 000 words. It’s intimidating to think I’ll have to keep this pace up over to most of December. It’s a lot of work but I’m really enjoying it, I wish I could do this for a living, maybe someday.

I have no illusions about this novel. As it is I know a lot of it needs retooling. I need to go back and edit all the dialogue to make it flow better. I also need to go back and fix the issue I seem to have with starting three out of four paragraphs with a noun or pronoun. I also need to beef up the descriptions of my characters and the world.

It’s interesting to me, that the character I liked most and had best fixed in my head before hand is most likely going to get cut from the first half of the book. He has four mini-chapters dedicated to his journals and I think I’ll just cut them out completely. I find they’re too world building oriented.

I’m keeping the polls from last week open since the twists will happen in the middle of the book, in about 10 000 more words.

It fascinates me what kind of emotions I’ve gone through, most of the first week I felt elated and couldn’t wait to write, the second I felt terrible I hated the novel and wanted to give up completely, now the third week it feels more like work but I look forward to discovering what happens.

For everyone who would like to be a Test/Beta reader, please email me or make a comment on one of my posts and I’ll get you a copy of the book when it’s done the second draft.

Here’s a poll for all you aspiring Writers.

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Thank you for your continuing support.

NaNoWriMo Update Two

I’m at chapter eleven with almost 25 000 words written. I still don’t know where things are going I do know its time to make a huge shift in the story. I’ve been building up and now the group is almost together. The drama is about to start and the first world changing adventure is about to start.

I’ve been alternating between the story and a character writing in his journal. I don’t think I like it. I find I’m telling too much in a short space of time.

I’ve decided to keep writing after NaNoWriMo is done and try to get this book to between 80 000 and 100 000 words. It needs a lot of work and the editing alone will be killer but I’ll have written a novel and that’s all I’m aiming for now.

After this next section I’m going to need to shake things up a lot what should I do?

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No one commented on the possible Title so here’s a poll with choices:

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Thank you for your support and hopefully the middle will flow half as easy as the start.

NaNoWriMo Update I

As 2pm Wednesday the 5th of November, 2008. I have 12 241 words. I’ve been writing a lot more then I thought I’d be able too. I seem to be averaging 2000 to 2500 words a day. I hope I can keep it up.

I’m working with “Viridian Skies” as a title. What do you think?

There are Five main Characters so far, and two villains of sorts. It seems I’ve missed the boat completely with the Absurd goofiness that I wanted to put into the novel. It’s closer to gritty and dramatic.

My chapters have been short around 2000 words. I think this still works so far. They might need to be extended or just grown over the rest of the book. I’m not sure yet. I’m really letting this flow naturally. I’m trying not to over think it. I have Ideas of how it’ll end but I’m not sure. I’d like to kill a character but I’m really not sure about that.

The world is developing well; everyone has a power of sorts, either drawing from psionic forces or arcane. Out of the five main characters only one is psionic and the other four are arcane. We have:

Cassandra Davanne: An ex con who’s trying to get herself out of trouble. She’s a hell of a fighter. She’s an fire Elemental. Meaning she can create and control limited magical fire around her body.

Arthur Jackson: He’s an AWOL Knight (Cross between cop and soldier.) who’s trying to discover the reason for his wife’s death. He’s a Jumper (I need a better name for it.) He can teleport short distances and has perfect night vision.

Paige: A cute little girl living on her own. She’s a Psionic and very powerful.

Roland Lavallée: A young retired Knight and very socially awkward. He’s a healer.

Richard Washburn: An old retired Knight who was too honest for the force. He’s Flyer.

As far as the story goes here’s a little taste with the chapter tittles.

Chapter One – In which we meet Cassandra Davanne and wonder why she’s so angry.
Chapter Two – In which we find Arthur Jackson wallowing in the past
Chapter Three – In which we meet Paige and her interesting logic.
Chapter Four – In which we learn about Roland Lavallée and his short career as a knight.
Chapter Five – In which we discover that Love is a beautiful thing and assassination is not.

I’d love to hear comments of suggestions
Thank you!

NaNoWriMo Part VI

Just under twelve hours before NaNoWriMo starts and closer to twenty four before I do, and I’m really getting nervous. I’ve been reading others blogs and other websites. It feels like everyone’s written an outline and planed their story. I have nothing ready except for Genre and Mood. I guess that’s something but reading that some people have their plot points set out worries me.

I’m getting a lot of support from friends and family and that helps settle me down. However every time I think about it my heart starts thumping and I get a little giddy.

My biggest problem is going to be not editing myself. I’ll often write a paragraph and then re-read it, over and over again, fixing little issues. I usually miss the homonyms, cursed things! If I can write straight I think I can average 1000 words an hour. That means an average of 2 hours writing daily. Gah! What have I gotten myself into?

Alright let’s see what I have decided so far with everyone’s help.

Genre: Modern Fantasy, with elements of Sci-fi and Detective/Filmnoir
Mood: A strange balance between Gritty and Absurd.

The first chapter will definitely introduce us to the characters, probably in the style of a Disaster story, jumping back and forth between characters and media.

I’m thinking of maybe writing journal entries that will introduce us to the world but not have anything to do with the main characters. Sort of a mini Auto-biography spread out through the book.

Other then that I have nothing; hopefully when I look over the polls, inspiration will hit harder then a crazed duck who thinks I’m a loaf of bread.

NaNoWriMo V

Wednesday polls are still open and I’m leaning to a world that everyday magic randomly starts again but we’ll see what happens.

Today will have five polls three about the Heroes and two about villains. This will help me get a clearer Idea of the characters. I will not look at these results till Saturday when I start to write.

As I’ve mentioned, I will blog from time to time, min once a week, with updates on how I’m doing. If I get stuck I’ll put up another poll asking what you think should happen.

On with the polls:

*Many of these will only let you vote for one thing, I want it that way.*

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Thanks again!